Lovely, crisp, specific imagery throughout & the last stanza shows true poetic quality: 1.) The decision to use the pool as a portal to traverse the speaker to childhood and admit his/her past physical frailties as a response to present emotional trials is a brilliant one.
2.) Resisting the urge to solve or resolve the tension you worked so hard to build with a neat ribbon as a final line made all the earned emotion in the early stanzas worth it.
Lovely, crisp, specific imagery throughout & the last stanza shows true poetic quality: 1.) The decision to use the pool as a portal to traverse the speaker to childhood and admit his/her past physical frailties as a response to present emotional trials is a brilliant one.
2.) Resisting the urge to solve or resolve the tension you worked so hard to build with a neat ribbon as a final line made all the earned emotion in the early stanzas worth it.
Your comments are generous, specific, and deeply encouraging.
As clear a picture of the anxieties of childhood as I’ve read in a long while. Well done.
“Breaking the bread of our acrimony” is a damn good line.