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Debbi's avatar

Married 46 years. Loved this stanza;

While you’re not looking,

I carry us around like a bag of rocks.

Under my pericardium,

I have stitched your soul a temporary home.

To offer some respite,

To rediscover permanency

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G. K. Allum's avatar

Oh! I am glad you like that stanza. It means a lot to me.

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@cheftinaluu's avatar

Me, too. I felt it. ✨

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Gabriela B.'s avatar

Beautiful and moving - there is nothing better than to find true love in the best of friends ❤️

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The Life Lessons's avatar

I loved this. Spot on observations.

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David Rizzo's avatar

I like the metaphor of romantic relationship over time to musical movements and variations. It works.

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@cheftinaluu's avatar

This is beautiful. As is choosing each other again. And again. And again. 💛✨

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Alex Jenkin's avatar

Beautiful word choices..

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G. K. Allum's avatar

Thank you, what ones stood out?

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Alex Jenkin's avatar

I enjoyed the musical terms a lot (naturally). But I think it’s more that’s there’s lots of soft S and Vowel sounds that give a gentleness to the whole phonetic flow of the piece..

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McCall Erickson's avatar

Delighted by the musical metaphors running through this one. And it's just oozing with tenderness. The tenderness of endings, liminal spaces, and beginnings...

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G. K. Allum's avatar

With all endings come new beginnings - and beginnings are beautiful x

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The Life Lessons's avatar

So moving. Deeply relatable. Thank you.

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G. K. Allum's avatar

Thank you :)

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Tombarriesimmons's avatar

Thank you for your poem, your thoughts, and for giving me my word of the day : pericardium

which I'm afraid was not in my vocabulary, but is now.

I'm thankful for the technology that allows me to hear the correct pronunciation for words that I know from reading but never hear in conversation, like interlocutor and paradigm

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