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W.S. Kirrin's avatar

I'm fascinated by this piece. The only capitalized words are the proper nouns, which really makes the choice to use lowercase 'i' stand out, and feel kinda small...

G. K. Allum's avatar

I’m glad you spotted that. It was intentional and I went back / forth on whether to capitalize the i or not.

W.S. Kirrin's avatar

It is such a small thing, but I'd be reading it differently if you'd done it the other way. This choice really worked for me and grabbed my attention

G. K. Allum's avatar

It’s gratifying to know you read the details. Really it is. Could easily be missed (and that’s fine too)

The Sawyer's Daughter's avatar

Really like this one!

G. K. Allum's avatar

Thanks, slightly more abstract than my normal poems.

Gub's avatar

Loved the imagery “acrylic light” and “dense fog illuminates”

Words like “seed and sown” bring movement and perhaps insinuate growth and reproduction

Sam Aureli's avatar

i loved those last lines!

Anna Wang's avatar

That’s awesome. I’ve just started a dating diary on Substack, and I’d love to grow it and reach a wider audience. Would you like to grow together?